The Lost Fae
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This story had only six chapters from the time of this review. That said, the first thing I noticed was that this story seems to be a spin on the story of Anastasia, of the House of Romanov, or at least inspired by the story. I have always liked stories that give a new version of, or even a completely different context to, a familiar tail. That was my reason for giving it an overall rating of five stars. The story overall is written in first person present tense, which can be a little off-putting, but upon further reading, there were little details and insights that I thought were enjoyable. The writing style could use some improvement. For example, the first chapter begins as Anya telling her story in third person past tense, which is fine, but without any warning, and within the same paragraph, the narrative enters first person present. Then there is the fact that dialogue continuously allows two people to speak within the same paragraph, confusing the reader. I'm not one to knock off points for grammatical errors, because I believe a good story is the most important feature, and errors in spelling and grammar can always be easily fixed later; but format is important. As for the story itself.. It begins through the perspective of a young 19-year-old girl, so it can be forgiven that the girl believes it's possible for King Lenin, who murdered her entire family, to "see the error of his ways", within the same night of his crime, and adopt the now orphaned girl. Furthermore, in the first chapter, she acknowledges that Lenin is the reason she's now an orphan, but without any indication or transition, a few chapters later, she is now wondering who murdered her family. This can easily be corrected by adding a break in the first paragraph, with an indication that her perspective has evolved. Another aspect of the story that I found to be a little disturbing is that there seems to be a continued love interest between her kidnapper and herself, even though he gave her a drug which he knew would cause her to go into a mating frenzy. I suppose the rules of each writer's universe are different, but many readers today will find it hard to forgive a male lead character for such an act. Just a warning. The story has many descriptions that allow the reader to see a beautiful world being created around the main characters, and so far, the plot is captivating. Nice work!