Torrents of Fate
This book was beautifully written and with a lot of great description! The only problems is, the blurb and preface give away too much of the story, meaning some of the things that happen aren’t a surprise to the reader. Although the plot is great, as it is revealed a lot in the preface and blurb, some people may not think it’s as good as it really is.
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The blurb is great, but maybe add a more open question, leaving the reader pondering many different outcomes of the story, rather than a question with just yes or no as an answer.
Your writing style is great but as for the grammar, I recommend you read through your book a few more times, maybe out loud, so you can spot the grammar mistakes. There are quite a few minor errors that can easily be changed.
The reason I only gave you four stars for your overall rating is partly because of the grammar, which pulls the reader out of the story every time they spot a grammar/punctuation/ spelling mistake and partly because you have a little too much away in the blurb and preface.
Overall an intriguing, full of suspense novel that I would recommend to anyone!