First off, Ruelle is the coolest name ever and I wish it were mine. Just had to get that off my chest. Haha! Second, your word choices and descriptions are lovely. A little overdone at times (beware of using too many fancy words just to sound nice, sometimes less is more) but lovely all the same. You paint a vivid picture. Third, the ideas (alien invasion, scientists' daughter, fight for justice!) are EPIC and they form an amazing foundation for this book.
Read the story now
That being said, I feel I should explain why I removed points:
1) Too much telling, not enough showing.
2) Commas in places they don't belong, as well as other punctuation errors.
3) Dialogue was forced and unnatural. (I try reading mine aloud to see if it would work in a real life conversation. Helps a lot!)
Keep up the good work!