The Bad Boy and The Angel: Constructive Criticism
Although there is an inconsistency in the implementation of punctuation, grammar and sentence structure, the story is really good! Having read the story from beginning to end, the only other area that needs to be fixed is the length of paragraphs. Note that shorter paragraphs are like teasers. They keep readers yearning for more as they jump from paragraph to paragraph. Like stepping stones. Now to the part where I congratulate the author. You are extremely talented when it comes to keeping readers hooked. The amount of details put into the descriptions pull readers inside the story. As if we ourselves are invisible and inaudible onlookers to the unfolding of events. So there is good use of images and imagery. The utilization of characterization is well done. Each character has their own unique traits which helps readers distinguish them. Furthermore, the plot structure is fascinating, as it contains elements of romance as well as mystery. Good job!
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