I loved this story. The mysterious events in the southwest chamber were not only frightening, but they bore a direct relation to the person occupying the room at each phase. The character of the librarian Eliza was delectable, if fairly cliched. There seemed to be something supernatural in the chamber, which cleverly exploited the weakness of whomever came into it. The first real victim was the imposing Louisa Stark, whose sturdiness and strength was built up craftily so that her departure was that much more damaging. Ultimately, the chain led to Sophia Gill, very much the main protagonist of this story, whose experience was the most terrifying of all. It reflected, to me, how the most strong among us are actually the ones who are likely to fail under stress.
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One thing which was annoying was the lack of consistency of narration by a single character. Some events were rushed and confusing, because I kept on thinking of what a certain character must be feeling rather than the one who was actually narrating. Flora's character seemed to have been conjured out of thin air with the retelling of the past of the sisters.
The author's technical skills were flawless. It was a great effort, and some parts were truly very well done.
The minister's interactions with the librarian were the best thing. Keep it up!