Nils

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Not bad plot-wise, but severely hindered

The story itself isn't bad, but almost unreadable due to the author's low proficiency with the English language. The spelling is sometimes off, sentence structure is a hindrance to understanding what is going on, the narrative flow sometimes comes to a screeching halt and then jumps ahead without warning in the next paragraph, and the general narrative style is not kind on the reading enjoyment.

The two things this author would benefit from most is
reading more professionally written material and paying attention to the style
and
an editor, or even just a proofreader

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A competent author that missed the mark

This book has an interesting setup, but fails to introduce any conflict worthy of the MCs agency. Its basic theme is salvation and penance in Christianity, but it fails to properly convey the concept of Christian morals and values and touches of none of the important philosophers of Christian theology like Thomas of Aquinus. Instead, it relies on the sole theme of "power of prayer" and nothing else. It takes the "all power through god and God alone" which offers little room for doubt and morality as a driving motivation and source of conflict.
The first three chapters failed to hook me in or deliver a character I could get invested in. The protagonist seems to be devoid of emotions except for the worry about his brother's soul, something completely outside the realm of of relatability for anyone not of devout evangelical faith.

The writing however is competent and good. Except for the janky formatting of dialogue and the occasional dream sequence, it is well in grammar and pacing. With a bit of honing and experience, it could serve as a great tool to deliver great plots and characters, if the author takes time to plan them out and present them properly.

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A fun exploration into teenage years

The author manages to write in a style that makes the backstory and exposition that dominates the early parts easy to read. There is no in medias res, just a start at the beginning. She tells the story of an intricate social web that gets upset by many factors and many actors trying to steer things their way.
One would have a hard time in trying to not feel nostalgia when reading this novel. It bathes in its own setup for a very intriguing development.
If you like the genre and are willing to read into a lot of social setup, then you are in for a great read.

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