A ménage of ideas and a medley of motley characters
March is an ensemble piece at present with a cast of characters that are under developed, but interesting. What makes the school so special? In my humble opinion, the story needs a central hero to guide us through the school and the story's mystery and wonder. Too much attention is paid to the politics of the school at the start without letting us discover that reality more naturally. By stating there are a number of 'cliques' we wonder if this is prescribed somewhere, and or if the school is organized that way. My memories of high school (is this high school or college?) are that cliques formed and faded and grew as we students grew and aspired to different things. In winter we had the skiers and in summer the baseball brats etc Cliques are there but should not be named; they exist but they don't. Also the number one reaction I had was that I felt the characters lacked a true purpose and that's because they had no solid tangible desires. Or fears. This is REALLY HARD TO DO IN AN ENSEMBLE PIECE and that's why most , even veteran authors, stick to one hero stories. The central protagonist becomes a lens through which they view the reality of the story. You can have more than one hero sure, but I should read the character's introduction and KNOW WHAT THEY WANT MOST because then everything they say can be weighed against their desire and then readers perceive subtext. Finally what makes March the school so special? is it the students? the staff? or the opportunities it unlocks in life - that's the key I think - that's why the school is so sacred and deadly because just maybe there is some corp. headhunting program that guarantees fame, wealth, stardom, etc. happiness.
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