Can work on it
My favourite aspect of this story is its length, and I love how you’ve managed to convey so much information in such a short story! Simply brilliant!
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Character development is great, and I can totally relate to Carmela, Luke, and everyone else in this book. Your writing style is simple and you have a knack for conveying information. Although, since this is a romance novel, I’d suggest making the language a lot more flowery to really get to the lovebirds reading this story.
You may want to proofread the story once more when you’ve got the time. I noticed a lot of typos, grammatical errors, missing full stops, and a few convoluted sentences. These hamper the quality of your novel, making it look a little shabby.
Besides these minor issues, great story, and I wish you luck on your next novel!