The story has a good beginning. You tell a lot about the characters right from the beginning, I personally like to have a little mystery about the character and learn more about them as the story goes on. But it isn't a bad thing, the way you present the characters is amazing. You say about Harrington being a player, but you don't clearly show that, he says he is a one woman man but then Casandra says he is player. Bit confusing. You also say Casandra is an Ice queen in the blurb, you don't show that either, how she is cold or any actions that reflect an ice queen like characteristic. I was intrigued by your story because my story is about a billionaire woman too and I wanted to see how you have interpreted the idea of a woman in power. And I liked it, your character is clearly emotionally driven, she craves a perfect family she never got, this is the polar opposite of my character. So overall I liked it.
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