I think you have a great writing idea here, though with editing and an expansive writing technique you can be able to elaborate more on your ideas and widen your scenes for your chapters. I am very skilled at pointing out errors while reading. Some of yours are hard to miss. You might need to recheck.
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Your settings need a lot of work. I only saw glimpses of what you wanted to paint and for that, it really broke me. Also, if you find I was commenting on your chapters and the rest did not have, I forgot to leave it. Your story was indulging, I loved it. I feel as time progresses, you will find your mistakes and fix them to perfection.
You need to add dialogue tags, or better ones, to your dialogues. You should also know how you add uplifted commas as well. For each dialogue spoken by a character, put a dialogue tag, and follow-up action. This broadens what is happening around your characters and it built a relationship with your characters and their co-responders.
I know they say writing is hard work, and putting your ideas into words is sometimes challenging. You had no problem trying to plan your ideas, and for that, you must be proud of yourself. I love your cliffhangers, and they were the reasons some chapters had missing comments.
For the most I have already told you, you need a little touch of character development for your main and minor characters. For instance, Anna and her mate. I didn't get a picture of what they really looked like.
Overall, beautiful story and I know this might be a sad first review but I am subject to it changing. This is not to make you feel bad about your writing. It is not my intention at all. We all need someone to point out our overlooked mistakes, so why not take mine when I see it first? Hope this finds you well. Keep writing and I will keep looking back for more updates.