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Incessant Updates Make For Miserable Readers

Plot was good, writing was good. This author has a horrible habit of never finishing any chapter, though. They keep updating chapters making readers think it’s a new chapter but...nope!...to our utter dismay and disappointment, it’s just fixing that word five chapters ago of adding another paragraph to the prologue.

Not reading this author’s work again.

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Intriguing story

The story is intriguing. It follows the lives of twin boy and girl after their community is wiped out.

The issue with it is the multiple grammatical errors, unfinished thoughts, and misspelled words (torcher instead of torture). Plus, it’s entirely too short to be a full book.

With editing of what’s here and adding to it to fully flesh it out, it holds promise.

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Compelling story

This is a good story that could be great with a lot of editing.

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Don’t bother

Do not bother with this one. The author clearly is not fluent in English. Spelling mistakes run rampant throughout this story. Words are misused in the most heinous manner imaginable.

The writing style can only be described as a jumbled mess. There is no warning that a shift in time is about to happen to share information from the past and when it switches back to present time it’s jarring.

Unless the author gets n editor and spends significant time editing this, it’s simply not worth the effort to try to decipher what’s happening.

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Not bad. Not the best.

The plot of the story was what kept me reading it. Several holes in the plot were annoying, though, but I’ll not spoil the story for other readers by bringing them up in the review.

Grammar and spelling were ok but need work. The writing style definitely needs work. It felt rushed in many places and dialogue was often juvenile.

Overall, the only reason to stay for the end of the book is the plot. It’s a pretty interesting one that makes you want to know what happens to the main characters. With a huge overhaul, major editing of dialogue, and correction of the grammar and spelling errors, it would be worth purchasing.

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Juvenile

I read it all the way through. I don’t really even know why I did, but thought to stick it out. Don’t bother with this one. First, the fact that it allows basically children to run the pack - let’s face it, a 19 year old is still a child, even if the law states they’re fully grown - then there are the contradictions. She told him her name, she didn’t; she encouraged her friend to hook up with the Beta, she didn’t. It goes on and on in circles and doesn’t let up.

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Awesome as always

Partwolf’s stories are always engaging and this one is definitely no exception.

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Awesome

I’ve followed this author for a long time. Their books don’t disappoint. While I do catch a spelling or grammar error from time to time, what stands out is how well edited Partwolf’s books are. The stories are compelling and just draw you in.

This one didn’t disappoint. Great story that might have started a little slow but the rest of it moved on nicely and keeps you yearning for more. I wish it didn’t have to have an end! I really hope there will be a sequel.

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Not bad

The plot is good, I just wish it hadn’t been so rushed. It was also rather cheesy at times.

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Compelling plot, poor execution

I’m enjoying the plot of this story but the errors make it difficult to read. The grammar and spelling aren’t terrible but need work. Things like “Hannah and I’s” rather than “Hannah’s and my” and random misspelled words that jump out at the reader make it an uncomfortable read for anyone who is well read. The only part of the plot I have a problem with is Hannah. She’s being written as a one year old but her age is actually closer to four. Sorry, four year olds don’t talk like she did in the beginning of the story, they don’t sit in high chairs (booster seats, maybe, but not high chairs), nor do they go to bed with sippy cups. No responsible mother would even put a baby to bed with a bottle, let alone a four year old with a sippy cup.

That being said, the plot is good. With some good editing to clean up grammar and spelling mistakes, and a bit of tweaking of the daughter, this would be an excellent story. I hope my review doesn’t put the author off. It’s a good story that just needs to be edited and have a few minor rewrites. I love the twists I’ve read thus far.

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