Compelling plot, poor execution
I’m enjoying the plot of this story but the errors make it difficult to read. The grammar and spelling aren’t terrible but need work. Things like “Hannah and I’s” rather than “Hannah’s and my” and random misspelled words that jump out at the reader make it an uncomfortable read for anyone who is well read. The only part of the plot I have a problem with is Hannah. She’s being written as a one year old but her age is actually closer to four. Sorry, four year olds don’t talk like she did in the beginning of the story, they don’t sit in high chairs (booster seats, maybe, but not high chairs), nor do they go to bed with sippy cups. No responsible mother would even put a baby to bed with a bottle, let alone a four year old with a sippy cup.
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That being said, the plot is good. With some good editing to clean up grammar and spelling mistakes, and a bit of tweaking of the daughter, this would be an excellent story. I hope my review doesn’t put the author off. It’s a good story that just needs to be edited and have a few minor rewrites. I love the twists I’ve read thus far.