First off let me just say WOOOOOW! You better go boy. How you started this story off, made me feel like I was standing in the hallway on the wgite and black checker boarded floor, watching Max and Duke walk pass me as they are carrying on in the story. I love how you describe how different they are, but at the same time how close they are, and omg that LILIAAAANNNN, she might just low key be the star (lol) because she something else (love how outspoken she is). I also love Mr. Borkus's character, you really made him a really cool dude (teacher). I can't wait to purchase your book, and I would definitely recommend it.
Read the story now
SN: don't forget to do your grammar checks.
Other than that, you did your thing. I love it,