The Rise of a Luna Review
This was a well developed story. There were few punctuation or grammar errors, and the way the author wrote was excellent for immersing yourself in the story.
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There were a couple things I did take note of. For example, when there was a time skip, there was not any indication of it, it just went straight from Caelynn doing something that morning then the next paragraph would be that night in bed with Erik. It confused me a few times while I was reading so maybe an asterisk or some kind of symbol to help signify the jump in time. The other thing was there was a lot of "eye rolls" from both the main characters. I know this is a great indication of annoyance, etc. Just be careful not to use to much of it.
But other than those two things, the way you wrote the characters was fantastic. I was able to emerge myself and get emotional on both sides.
Keep up your writing! You are doing great!