S. S. Tehreer

Bring Me That Sweet Revenge!

Plot: CHECK
Characters: CHECK
Conflict: CHECK
Setting: CHECK
Villains: CHECK

Check, check, check, and check! This is an amazing concept for a story. The plot is very driven and the characters are very relatable! The supernatural theme surrounding the entire story is A-MAZING! There's a mix of supernatural, romance, fantasy, lots of steamy scenes. It's truly epic! The pacing is just right, from the first chapter all the way to the most recent. The promise the writer makes you in the first chapter is delivered every time you turn the page. The main character Jaleena is not your typical heroine and that is what makes the story even more interesting. She's a mix of emotion and a ticking time bomb.

I will be very honest, not used to reading "steamy scenes" and usually its not my preference, but I did manage to read them. And they weren't awkward, which is I good thing, I guess. BUT I do have a little be of issue with the writing structure. It gets difficult to read when the dialogue of multiple characters is clustered together. It just makes readability a little hard. I'm not a grammar nazi and I won't comment on it because I feel as if you are writing with a flow. So grammar and spelling is not what turned me off, but the structure of the paragraphs. This is technical stuff and it has nothing to do with the story, it just makes your writing more presentable and easier to digust. Just needs a little editing here and there. Other than that... I'm waiting for more chapters! So please keep writing!

Great Potential

I really enjoyed the writing style and thats what kept me hooked. You have a wonderful way with words and the way you describe the situation, personalities, and surrounding without really telling the reader. I like Sierra's character and can relate to her. I felt her loneliness, the feeling of belonging without really fitting in. I still am waiting for conflict to arise in the story. I'm not sure where the plot is taking me, what the issues will be. I have a feeling there's going to be a revelation about each characters' parents, maybe some relationship developing with your lead characters. When I read the summary and prologue I thought it would be a fantasy novel, maybe I interpreted it incorrectly. But overall, it's a good start. I hope you start introducing some elements of the plot. You have to continue writing because I sincerely enjoyed it.