Bring Me That Sweet Revenge!
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Check, check, check, and check! This is an amazing concept for a story. The plot is very driven and the characters are very relatable! The supernatural theme surrounding the entire story is A-MAZING! There's a mix of supernatural, romance, fantasy, lots of steamy scenes. It's truly epic! The pacing is just right, from the first chapter all the way to the most recent. The promise the writer makes you in the first chapter is delivered every time you turn the page. The main character Jaleena is not your typical heroine and that is what makes the story even more interesting. She's a mix of emotion and a ticking time bomb.
I will be very honest, not used to reading "steamy scenes" and usually its not my preference, but I did manage to read them. And they weren't awkward, which is I good thing, I guess. BUT I do have a little be of issue with the writing structure. It gets difficult to read when the dialogue of multiple characters is clustered together. It just makes readability a little hard. I'm not a grammar nazi and I won't comment on it because I feel as if you are writing with a flow. So grammar and spelling is not what turned me off, but the structure of the paragraphs. This is technical stuff and it has nothing to do with the story, it just makes your writing more presentable and easier to digust. Just needs a little editing here and there. Other than that... I'm waiting for more chapters! So please keep writing!