Steve Waldrop

The Good Kids

Wow. Of all the stories I have read on Inkitt, this is my favorite. The writer captures completely the sight, smell, look, and emotion of a small town and the teens that inhabit it. Descriptions were woven seamlessly into the narrative in a way that added instead of feeling like a pause in the events. The main character is well played, a young almost-woman who is trying to survive the boredom of her town. What she does, and the mystery of the result will be something she will carry for the rest of her life. I especially like the way the author handled that mystery. It will haunt the reader and make them wonder. Well done, Erin Swan.

Minerva Atramentous, Necromancer

Okay, Avyn, you have me hooked. I am intrigued by who Minerva is and would like to know her backstory as well as more of what she is doing now. Er, perhaps I should say what she was doing since her place of employment just blew up. I want to know who the creatures she saw are and why they want to blow things up on her world.
There were a couple of places where the flow could be tightened up a bit, but overall it had a good pace to it. I do question the words 'inflections' as in the stone's glittering inflections.
I want to have more! Do not stop writing this.