What is your opinion?
Suoermassive planetary ecosystem
"I loved it? Good description of a Jupiter supermassive planet with life., Ymir? Absolutely. So, how does a million year old crittur the size of a country handle itself when confronted by high-tech aliens? Is it native? Is it even a single creature, or really a clade? Frasier, the banker, is kind of a flat character. Give him some dimension other than a Zurich gnome. Give him a lech for the good Dr., A series of twitches. Hypochondria seems about right. Obviously, you have quite a biology problem. A single nervous system will not do. Distributed nervous system like an octopus? Diffusion and osmotic pressure are not going to be enough for that much tissue. Nutrition gets distributed by parasitic worms? When two parts decide to go in different directions, does it split? Can it encyst and do space travel? Will it eventually eat Frasier, get indigestion and sue the bank?"
Ymir
"Very, very intriguing! I like the writing style, the description of the worlds, the characters and how the story unfolds; answering the questions gathering in your head as you read with an effortless flow. I want more!!"
Ymir
"I enjoyed the story and the reference to old Norse Mythology is very nice. It is a bit difficult to read as you do tend to over use proper names. A few redundancies as well such as "Mr Frasier estimated her age to be between thirty and thirty-five years of age." With a bit of tightening up this story could go from good to excellent. More please."
