What is your opinion?
INSPIrational
"It was really an inspirational story..u describe the relationship and the pain between the son and his father so clearly...no mistakes were present in d story ...KEEP IT UP"
A new beginning
"A touching story indeed! Poverty and its effect on a family has been projected beautifully. The author has been successful in bringing about feelings of love and hardship. She has set the stage for a strong novel. I look forward to reading more. I'm sure the technical side could be brushed up easily."
Review
"This story has great potential, and I cannot wait to see what happens next. The writing is good, however this needs to be thoroughly edited."
Needs improvement
"Your blurb I felt needed a better description. The overall story had a lot of grammar mistakes. I felt as though this story was rushed. Talk about feelings, scenery, descriptions and talking about emotions are essential to every story. This helps the person reading see what you want them to look at when they read your stories. There was too much going on so quick. You can talk about a past. What was the main characters relationship like with his father before all this happened. Give good memory flashbacks if necessary as he is thinking about taking his own life. Give readers a more emotional story so that they are pulled in and they can relate to your story. The ending of chapter two felt rushed and what I can say is that this story needs improvement."
A thoughtful parable
"You can tell there's a depth of thought and feeling behind the story. The fact that it comes through despite the difficulties in language and writing style is impressive. It reads more like an attempt at poetry, in the sense that for a 'story' it tries to get you to shoulder a huge weight of feeling much too quickly. I also suspect there is a cultural element which some readers may struggle to identify with in the absence of more context."
