Wonderfully enthralling!
"I sat down with the intention of reading one chapter before I started my homework and ended up binge-reading the whole thing. This story was extremely enjoyable, and I'm eager to see where it goes. Everything about it was enthralling, from the plot, to the cast of characters. The world that you've created for this story is dark and beautiful, and I'm curious to see where things will go next. I liked the idea of there being so many dangerous creatures outside the villages and towns. It added a really fun, fantastical element. I was surprised by the turn of events that led to Alex fleeing from the Sanctuary, and it was handled very well. The assassins remind me of a group called the Dark Brotherhood from a game called Skyrm. I'm curious if you've played this, because lots of the elements, from the assassins group and the college to the cast of characters remind me of Skyrim. I think my favorite part of this story was the characters. I loved the interaction between Alex and Conner (I ship it). And I also liked the characters that you developed in the Sanctuary. I'm really curious about the one mysterious guy (I saw him called both Micha and Micah in there, so I'm confused about his name). I was amazed at the way you gave each character a different voice. That is EXTREMELY hard to do, and it makes it so much more real. My only complaint is that I went through the first half of this story not knowing if Alex was a girl or a boy. I'm still not certain, although I assume by Alex's relationship with Conner that she's a girl. I would appreciate some clarity on that because I like to have a picture of the protagonist I'm following from chapter one. Other than that, it was great! The writing was very clean and enjoyable, and I like Alex's voice. I only noticed a few typos here and there. All in all, it's a great start! I can't wait to see where it goes!"