What is your opinion?
Is this an intro or full book?
"This feels like the start of a novel rather than a complete work, but it hadn't been updated in a while so I'm not sure... Anyway, as an introduction it's great, it brings the reader in at a nice pace where they get a good feel for the world without feeling rushed or it dragging on unnecessarily. The setting of the Emporium (in book) is intriguing and opens up a lot of possibilities. Same for the few characters involved so far and it's nice that we're getting glimpses into their histories too. I gave three stars for plot as it doesn't work as a full book, in the event this gets updated I'll review my review. I'd recommend this to both fantasy & sci-fi readers, but more so if it felt finished rather than an intro."
Promising. Great Chapter one
"This is a great start to a novel but doesn't work so well as a complete story (I have no idea if it is complete because the author doesn't say) This is a great phrase: Sweet smoke I love the setting, the characters and its very funny, witty and visually stimulating, The wrapping up at the end takes too long and doesn't quite hold together: Why couldn't Sybylia escape before if she is suggesting she can now even with Candy still there? Why did Candy kill Finch when she was programmed by his colleagues to only keep Sybylia in? Why wouldn't any corrupt person on Wadi with gold supply it to her for a high price? These questions suggest the story needs to be a full length novel but as I say great promise. The descriptions of locations are a bit unwieldy and the author is far to fond of 'end caps', whatever they are. Also, wooden strips in windows are called mullions. I found the following typos although generally its pretty well proof-read: whimper should be whimpers ‘my’ ears Wad lacking 'i' Fire ‘ragging’ within Bare my sole I think you mean soul Lined the helves"
