What is your opinion?
Nothing to say
"Wow! I have never read a Sci-fi story like this one! Great job! You got my vote! I loved the science you employed into this story, it's so advanced, and the virus, and everything! Your characters are well shaped! Best of luck in the Sci-fi contest!"
Good Story
"I very much enjoyed this story. ."
Good But Freaky
"I thought that this was a very well written story and that I would recommend this story to other readers and the story does get kind of freaky at the end which added a cool twist on the story. Overall great story though :)"
Oh Dear...
"Well, the story is very nice... Creepy because it could totally happen what with all the technological advances of modern age, and that's what makes this story hit so close to home because it COULD very well happen. And honestly anyone that would go into a virtual reality where you can create anything with a thought would be nice, yet you gotta remember the nightmares like the animatronics that you created in the story, so in all honesty a virtual reality isn't all that pleasant... I'm rambling... Sorry, the story is well written and very well thought out, I like it a lot and would recommend this story to anyone willing to read a very interesting story."
YIKES!
"I think this is the scariest story that I have read on here! It was great! I can totally see this happening with all the virtual reality technology in this society, and, having tried it before, I'm pretty creeped out. The characters were interesting, and I liked your descriptions. They were clear and evocative. I think the only thing that needs work is that every once in a while you switched tenses. Great work! Good luck in the contest!"
Enjoyable story
"The author certainly has a fanciful imagination! The story flowed well, and there was enough explanation of the technology involved and enough foreshadowing of the ending that it didn't come out of the blue. I enjoyed the story and the storytelling style. I did have a few quibbles, however. Nothing major, but minor distracting things that took me out of the "reader's trance". 1) the story needs a thorough going over for typos and punctuation. There were several places where commas were needed, and at least one word with a letter missing at the end. (A spell-checker wouldn't catch it because the word was spelled correctly; it just wasn't the correct word for that sentence.) 2) ,It would help to replace some passive writing with a more active voice. For example, when the protagonist first meets the griffon, he thinks "I could feel the griffon's gaze on me.. "I could feel" is passive. Better would be "I felt". Better still would be "The griffon gazed at me". 3) The tense was uneven at the end, jumping back and forth between present tense and past tense. Pick one or the other. For example, the first three sentences of the last scene, which begins with "I woke up" is in past tense. But then the next two sentences were in present tense: "I can now see." It's permissible to switch tenses between scenes/chapters, but not within the same scene, or--as was done here--n the same paragraph. Still, overall it was a good story. It just needs some polishing."
