What is your opinion?
The Barrier: Two Worlds
"I like the story, but I felt that any story that has to do with the supernatural should be a little more simplified for good comprehension. I suggest you simplify other chapters for easy understanding, sometimes you sounded poetic and your usage of undigestible vocab seems to temper with the flow of the story. I see the effort put into the story already and how you struggle to guild it against flaws, too early to talk about a few errors that need editing, but please watch it. Overall, the story is yielding good results already. Simplified other chapters, and do not make them too mystical or incomprehensible. Good work."
Review swap
"I liked how the beginning of this story balanced information given to the reader and mystery. The balance really helped me keep reading when the plot wasn't as interesting, as I felt that the plot kind of lost its way for a little bit in the first chapter and I wasn't sure how the information I was reading was going to come back later. I really thought that the second chapter had nice direction, though, and I really loved the fairies' accents, haha. Originally I was going to give this story 5 stars on punctuation and grammar and stuff, but I felt like the standard slipped a little as the story went on and I was running into more and more errors. But overall it was pretty solid, and I thought that this author has a nice way of writing prose. I think the weakest point may be dialogue. That being said, some of it isn't bad at all -- I actually quite enjoyed some of it and loved how realistic it seemed. But those super realistic moments clashed with the moments that I felt weren't as good, and I would just love to see how the story pops with consistent quality in the dialogue. This author has something good started here and I look forward to seeing more!"
