What is your opinion?
Well Written
"I really love these stories about little kids who have the world thrown against them. You added another great to this patheon! I loved the way you delivered this, but I thought you could have done a bit better in some areas, technically wise. Still, I really liked the story!"
Great!!
"I was on the edge of my seat while reading the last part when Pan discovers Lynx is a witch, but a ten year going too a dangerous forest to help her mother is really adorable, The odds are totally against her not only her age but also her body health of getting sick easily. Forests tend to get cold the further you go in them, not to mention the dangerous animals she could run in on, but with this story being fantasy I think animals are probably the last thing she needs to worry about. I hope you will continue this story I can't wait to see if Pan can save her mother."
Whimsical
"The very fairy tale-esque first paragraph speaking of a forbidden forest outside the city walls was certainly a great hook. I felt this first chapter did a fine job of setting up the plot and introducing us to a lovable, spunky protagonist. It is clear what Pan wants and what is at risk should she fail on her mission. It is also clear that she is ten years old, based on her thoughts and actions. Besides a few run-on sentences that are easy to miss, I saw no issues with grammar. I look forward to finding out what happens next in this magical tale."
