What is your opinion?
Humour Me a Tale
""Humour me a tale." In those four words one can see your distinctive writing style. The stocky, short fragments give way to a new, distinctly-you type of poetry - not flowing, but somehow angry or different. Many concepts are portrayed in your poems. I had only one problem with this book: and it was that, like many others said, that it was unclear - confusing. Poetry doesn't always need to be easy - it can be poetic and metaphorical. But I found it hard to understand and juxtapose the different fragments in the first poem to put them together. The second poem was better - it seemed, to me (although this might be just my interpretation) that the narrator might be alcoholic, hurting his wife and making those scars their bond. A fascinating, but also sad and horrible concept. The third poem, too, was better, what with the mouse. I love how all the poems are a bit different, although the narrative style stays true. However, it might be good to try making your poems clearer - perhaps make it obvious in the first verse what you're talking about, as one would in an introduction, so the reader is not left squinting at the screen and wondering what the poem is about until somewhere at the end. Other than that, this was unique, and for that I must give credit."
Interesting
"Poetry has to be in the eyes of the reader. That makes it difficult to be objective. I found the choice of ultra short phrases and sentences set a style. Interesting because the author captures the essence of a particular object in a few words. I read it not without a struggle. A very interesting approach. (I didnt give it stars in plot rating as there, in my opinion, wasn't a plot. When I clicked the 'submit' button, my review returned this message: 'Please rate this stories plot' and didn't advance, so I gave it a random score in the plot scoring. I request the author ignores that score).."
This didn't make sense to me.
"I'm sorry, but I found it really hard to get into this. I didn't understand some of your descriptions, and I found it very hard to comprehend. There was very little structure on the stanzas, which inhibited a natural rhythmic flow, and generally speaking, the poems confused me. Perhaps with some editing, the poems could potentially be good, but right now, they need a bit of work. Good luck with your writing :)"
Have Fun
"Pupae. Where to start with "Pupae?" To begin with, you have nothing to start with. This one just tries to appeal to those who can care for the "you" that the book is talking about. It is totally ridiculous and just every perspective poetry ever. It doesn't even feel like poetry, just a bunch of words crumpled together and called it "poetry" or "art" for the author. It doesn't give any context at all. It is just a mystery that is just random like "life" except its words. Abundant punctuation errors litter all over the screen which is an editor's nightmare but that just makes you think it is an "error." Think to feel that something is wrong and something is right is just one and the other except that different outcomes blossom from these decisions "to read" or "to understand." What does it all mean from the perspective of "you?" If you is even used as the you anyone uses in everyday life. It makes sense "to see" it wrong than to make it right because "you" have no control over the poems because you are not "the author." It doesn't force you to read because the one it is looking for is "you." Who is this "you" to begin with? It drives the simple mind to take the benefit of the doubt "to not know." I myself wrote this, not because "I" wrote this but rather I is the product of "you." And that is just the blurb. Not even talking specifically that it is poetry. Normally, anyone would call this a collection of poems or a collection of stories or a collection of memories and experiences, if you're that deep, but it is not that simple, even though it is. It separates the normal from the unique because it knew it is "different" and not the same of itself but the "self" part is left out and completely forgotten. It is now left a bunch of gibberish and lost messages that anyone could've wrote because they are words. Examining...no.... dissecting this further would only make it far more complex and much harder to understand because everyone forgot where they came from. The fact that it is a book has been erased and the emotions are shattered and rearranged to this pile of bad poetry. This is why it would never make sense to anyone fully because "you" is missing. It reveals to you as a text-driven cluster of words of what happened or where it left off but never where it is "not" going because there is nothing special about poetry and nobody determines it as "likable" nowadays. Honestly, this would never work as an actual functioning book but most definitely worth checking out if anyone would still be willing to check in now and again because this has "no end nor beginning" but "has a middle." We are used to reading like, chronologically if possible, as do cavemen; left to right, right to left; are practically the same thing. That would mean nothing has changed since then so does the way to look the time: you see the sun, its day; you see the moon and the stars, its night. Identification and surety of the means satisfy a humanity. To believe that life is difficult but sleep isn't "too hard" is it? Technically, still a part of life. So is everything about life so difficult? The better question is: Is there another way to live? Sure it may be difficult but think about death, for instance, it is "easy." It is a form of escapism from the difficulties of life. Although, nobody can prove this because has anyone seen "death" or even "God" and "lived" to tell the tale. Anybody can make their guesses but that's just it "guesses." A form of trying "to know." All in all, don't read it. In numbers: Positives Poetry 1: 0/3 Poetry 2: 1.5/3 Poetry 3: 0/3 Plot 1: 0/3 Plot 2: 0.13/3 Plot 3: 0/3 Identity: 1.00/3 Impact: 0.1/3 Innovation: 1.00/3 Execution: 0.8/2 Personality: 1/1 --------------- 5.10/30 Negatives Poetry 1: 0/3 Poetry 2: 0.15/3 Poetry 3: 0/3 Plot 1: 0/3 Plot 2: 0.7/3 Plot 3: 0/3 Style 0.1/3 Core 1.1/3 Elements 0.15/3 Cliches 0.15/3 ----------------- 2.2/30 Neutrals (+ or -) Punctuation (-) 2/2 Mystery (+) 2/2 Potential (+) 1/2 ------------------- Total 4.8/30 -not even surprised-"
Hard to Understand
"The imagery is hard to picture. The punctuation is misplaced within sentences. The main idea is present in the first stanza and then a whole different idea is introduced without notice. But the author already reviewed their work and gave it a horrible opinion, which is quite strange. I don't rate in numbers. Keep writing and good luck to you."
