Impeccable Stories

"The critiques are listed by chapter -- just so you know. :) Today, You Died - Well this was unexpectedly unique. I like the location - I haven't read many pieces based in the Amazon. The voice is strong and humorous. I truly enjoyed reading this piece. I would give you some advice, but I have none. Well done! ^.^ Sapphire's Savior - Wow... That was amazing. How on earth you could grasp an entire story and such powerful imagery in such few words is beyond comprehension. The plot is amazing, the characters so powerful, and omg... I don't know where to start... I'm not a big fan of dystopia, well maybe sometimes when my crazy imagination takes another one of its bizarre turns, but you've made me a believer today. This was just breathtaking. I hope you continue this story, because it has enough potential to evolve into a novella or a novel. Darkness - This was a well-written piece of literature that I enjoyed. I cannot wait to read more works by you in the future. Great job structuring this entire piece. I really liked the way you used your words to give the reader a feeling of the circular impending death that the narrator faced. At first the third paragraph felt repetitive, but as I write this I understand it better. I'm guessing it was to give the reader a darker feeling that as soon as the narrator dies he (she) is thrown back into the turmoil and despair. Great job. HIM! - I enjoyed this! =) The conflicting emotions and the simple yet meaningful lines tell a dark and passionate story. I truly enjoyed this story and I liked the descriptions and details.I also love how the clipped aspect of it gives off an almost poeticism to your story. Good job! =) Cheddar's Christmas Tale - This was a refreshing boost of whimsy after reading the darker stories before it! I like how you've arranged your chapters. Anyways., this is adorable. :) I instantly fell in love with Cheddar Little. When Brie wasn't with him at the hole, I felt scared. It was a good story. :) If I had younger siblings I'd love to read this to them, because it's such a cute children's story. Deadly Love - Interesting story...I liked this a lot! Your words flow very smoothly, your descriptions are great, and I absolutely love the names you came up with. Very creative, kudos for that. But, I have to know. What happens to Alucio and Draconite?! Excellent piece :) Cure to Writer's Block - Well, that was certainly, uh, /interesting/. xD There were some points where you needed a comma or there was an unnecessary one added. Albeit it was strange, I can see the point you've made in this story, although I'll admit that /that/ never happens when I get writer's block. ;) Words of Realism - This is a beautifully described story! The way that the relationship unfolded, was great! Thanks for the great work! Lost in Translation - This is so cute and the translation at the end was so unexpected! Great job! Love Never Fails - I really enjoyed this story. I liked the first paragraph. It really drew me in. I wanted to know what was going on. I enjoyed the whole evil and light idea and the way your ended just made me get those shivers. You know the ones that you get right after you finish an extremely good story? Overall, I loved this piece and I hope you continue this piece, because it has potential! Agony - This was really interesting. The whole thing was very chilling. Your imaginative descriptions were very artistic and realistic. I could envision the characters suffering. I applaud that we were able to understand the entire thing and yet we still had loads of mystery. Overall, great job! Well, I can now say that as a writer your forte is short stories and poetry. You're very descriptive and have a vast vocabulary. I truly love your writing and I cannot wait to read more of your writing in the future! I wish you the best luck in writing and life! <3"