Battle of the Heart

"The story just keeps on wanting me to see the next chapter. I love its flow, suspense, and gradual build-up. I am sure as you progress you will build more on your character development. Bring in more confrontational characters and let's see how Alice can handle it, it sucks though but it is the fun. This way, you don't make the story more on the narrative. Keep a close watch on your grammar. Overall, the story is worth reading and I am sure it will appeal nicely to a lot of readers. Good work!"