What is your opinion?
Great start
"Your writing is rich and descriptive. Eg. "She fiddled with her badges and the sewed, weird stuffed creatures she had made on her bag." She introduces Richard, he had 'a specific dress code that made him unique and beautiful'. Later, after seeing the four spirits standing next to the grave, she turned back to look at Richard. He'd dissappeared like the vaporous spirits who were alongside the grave. Vivid writing."
wow great beginning
"I want more now!!!! I really enjoyed your beginning and I loved the concept of your novel. Your main character is strong and likeable. Keep going I look forward to more...."
So Far So Good
"I like the concept of the story so far. I look forward to reading on. Small piece of criticism- I felt that the first paragraph was littered with overuse of "she did" or "she was" etc etc. Can be easily edited, but is a bit too repetitive for the reader. All in all though, so far so good. :)"
