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The Paper Mill
"All in all a fun read. The author has a smooth writing style that flows well. Good descriptions throughout. Good work! Just give it a read over to check for minor grammatical and spelling issues."
The Paper Mill
"Overall, I very much enjoyed the beginning of the story. The only thing I would say is that there was way too much going on at the end. Between the killing and all the large descriptive words, I can see somebody getting very confused. Another thing is that the change for Adam is too fast. One minute he's a clumsy guy crying because he was fired, the next he murdered the boss. Maybe instead of him being sad about being fired, make him more angry to create a better transition."
