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I honestly loved this book every single time I've read it. The plotline is fantastic and the characters are interesting. There are only a few things that stuck out to me throughout the whole story, but they weren't too big.
I would say that the character's changed attitudes towards things very quickly and their views were hard to follow because they weren't always consistent. I think that the main characters didn't have a lot of time as opposing people, and were almost immediately attracted to each other in some way. I would also say that I was very confused the first time I was reading about the cave, but it all got cleared up once I continued. There weren't any big issues, just little things I've noticed.
Overall Bee, I'd say you absolutely did a wonderful job(as usual) and I wouldn't change anything about the way you write, but things just move a little too quickly.
Hope you're well, as always<3
I honestly love the plot and idea of this story, and I want to applaud you for your execution.
But I will say that the beginning 4ish chapters were a little hard to follow as the time jumped around a lot and characters just kind of popped up out of nowhere with little explanation.
Another thing is that you can be overly descriptive. I know that a lot of time people don't describe enough, but at some points, you just went overboard and it sounded almost like a list of things instead of a nice paragraph. Just a note.
I honestly did really enjoy the book so far though, and I can't wait to see what you do with it!
(sorry this took so long, I had school and homework)
The Paper Mill
Overall, I very much enjoyed the beginning of the story. The only thing I would say is that there was way too much going on at the end. Between the killing and all the large descriptive words, I can see somebody getting very confused.
Another thing is that the change for Adam is too fast. One minute he's a clumsy guy crying because he was fired, the next he murdered the boss. Maybe instead of him being sad about being fired, make him more angry to create a better transition.
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