What is your opinion?
Rest
"Such a short but heartbreaking story. The pain was so real"
Heartbreaking
"Oh, this made me sad. The classic story of a child dying in their mother's arms will never not be heartbreaking. Your writing style fits the narrative of a dying child very well: I really like it that you didn't make him overly naive: writing children is a common stumbling block for many, but you aced it! I said earlier that dying children are sad as a default. This story rides on that quite strongly, and I feel that it could've been even sadder if there had been something more to it. But then, it is a very brief piece, and it is difficult to put a lot of plot in such a small amount of words. You managed to break many a heart with so little. The minimalisic narrative not only shows us the viewpoint of the child but also his mother: her desperate hope and sadness. I think that hit me even worse than the child's fate. Overall, great job."
Loved the writing style!!
"Even though the plot was simple and relied heavily on pathos (which isn't necessarily a bad thing, I just don't tend to like those kinds of stories) the writing style swayed me. You have great technical skills, you start out in the middle of the scene, which is amazing for catching readers' attention. All in all, it's a great story and I would recommend it to anyone who is in the mood to have their heart broken :)"
