What is your opinion?
Imperious
"A good beginning to the story so far."
Emotional!
"You wrote the emotions very well - I could sympathise with and understand the character, and she was immediately loveable. Your writing style is also wonderful - soft-spoken and sweet to read, the first chapter was well-written and you clearly already know a bit about writing - how to show, describe... There were no info blocks, and I loved this start. If there were more, I'd continue reading. In some places you could show even more and tell even less - and at the start, when you said "an event in my past" it sounded a little awkward. There were places here and there with typos or things that could be improved, which I pointed out (they should be found on your e-mail) but overall, this was a short, fun read. Great! Keep going!"
