What is your opinion?
Love
"Great story love the plot"
Good
"From your word usage to describe things, its good. But perhaps for ease of reading, you should make spaces between paragraph, because its look too crowded and hard for people to read. Its a good starter and keep up a good and hard work"
An intriguing start
"From this one chapter, there's no true way to tell where this story is going, though we get a hint of something at the end that piques the curiosity. I can't comment much on the plot since there isn't much to go on at this stage, but it is a promising start. The blurb itself was a bit redundant with the opening phrase "Among the planets." Perhaps running some of these sentences together or even eliminating a few would make for a better hook for readers. There were some grammar issues and places where names and titles could be capitalized, but these are easy fixes. I liked much of the description. We get a sense of people and what the main character sees and experiences. Once there are more chapters out, this has the potential to be an enjoyable read."
Among the planets
"The story starts off in more of a story tellers view than a normal narration like others said you can start with your protagonist already matured but in past tense looking back at the reasoning and former events that brought up to her current state. That would make a smoother transition unto the core of your novel"
Really cool!
"This isn't generally a story I'd read, but the chapters I've read so far were really really interesting. I like it a lot, and I'm going to continue to read."
Intriguing
"Although the first chapter could've started out a little better, it really intrigued me. The plot itself, was very intriguing, and I'm definitely going to put it in one of my reading lists. Also, thanks for reviewing my story!"
Good Start
"I think this is a good start to an interesting story. It really sets up a world and I'm interested to know what happens next. I think you should keep writing and continue to develop this story."
Not bad
"For a work in progress, this isn't half bad. The chapters are short and easy to follow. The grammar needs a big touch up. There wasn't much of a hook in the first chapter but that can easily be fixed. I would definitely recommend describing things more--the characters, the scenery, we don't know what anything looks like. Also, based on the blurb, I would recommend changing one of the twins's names. Having Xander and Zander seems a little confusing since they are pronounced the same. I look forward to seeing how this story progresses!"
among the planets
"your should read the sleeper awakens by orson wells"
