Prologue
Great rebellions are never the fault of the individuals, but of the government.
4018 is the year. Wherever you looked, utter chaos and destruction bred under the rule of ignorance. Did we cause all this suffering or the aliens?
Can I consider them monsters or human? They did this, but we (the citizens) approved this to happen. We played dumb when the evidence was right before our faces.
We allowed our idiotic nature to control us. And now we are paying the price by watching the innocents die by the hands of foreigners we let take over the world. However, I guess the dread of the unknown has stopped many lives from fighting back.
I am done trying to live in fear. If I need to give my life for the greater good, then my blood and fire will go into this struggle, this revolt, to drive out the aliens that have taken over our globe. We as a species need to resist, to give everyone a say. Not just the ones with money and influence.
My name is Ruelle Jade Everest. This is my tale of before and after outsiders invaded earth. This is my adventure of how I fought for what I believe in.
Those people afraid to do anything, I allow you a voice. I present you a chance to challenge for your freedom. If we do not face our common enemy Earth as we know it, won't ever be the same.
the last two sentences should be the same sentence, perhaps with a comma, and 'as we know it'
really intriguing so far!
That's a good blurb, which is a great starting point as you'll have readers hooked straight away. I wasn't as keen on the first chapter, if only because the narrator comes off as dare-I-say a bit of a know-it-all? *insert joke about my own hypocrisy here but oh well* I'm also not so keen on her name because it follows the typical dystopia trend of being really fancy. Maybe if all the other characters' names are like that when I read on I'll stop considering it a problem, as it's canon to the world you have created - which is a pretty good dystopian world. And the intro is intriguing as well, with the hook to read on and find out what has changed and who the outsiders are. What's more...grammar! Your grammar is more or less flawless! I'm using exclamation marks because my grammar is horrific and I don't see such perfect grammar very often. Anyway hope I wasn't too harsh; these are my thoughts on the first chapter and I'll read the rest when I get time (probably in a couple of hours or so).