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love it
"I love this poem and I agree with what Hayden d Linder said. You need to separate some lines but other than that this is a good poem"
I liked it.
"I like this poem. And I love the concept you went with on this. But the beginning and the end need a little work. I am paraphrasing here; “The flowers remind of a distant spring.” No they don’t. Your poem goes way passed the ideas and memories of Spring. So you need something that captures All of the memories of this poem. Preferably something with a hook. A real ‘attention getter’ of an opening. AND NOW THE ENDING. “So realize vase is full memories.” Just kinda sucks. Which keep in mind, I loved everything in the middle. But you need a closing statement that is profound. Especially for a piece like this."
