What is your opinion?
Good shot!
"It needs work, u need to work on details and descriptions. U need to work on making the focus on the concept of what u want to represent to us readers. More u need to explain what is happening. I think it would be better for you to think whatever you write as an episode of serial or movie or something. IN that way we (writers) can see what readers are getting. Anyway, u have got the plot work hard and u have got an awesome story! Great work!"
Good but can be better
"You have a great plot and even better ideas. Keep writing and fix the few mistakes with grammar."
Needs some work
"The plot is interesting and has potential. You should add some dialogue and background information and history to make chapters more lengthy and more interesting to read. (although, it was already interesting to begin with). Also some grammatical errors are present. What are Grimley motives and thoughts? You should clarify them in the first chapter to add more depth to the character. Does he want to be a knight? Why does he want to be one? Just a few questions to think about.. I actually like the narrative voice you give Grimley, which comes from the way you write. I applaud you for that."
