What is your opinion?
Appreciation and Commission Request
"Hi! I’m Eloise, a digital artist passionate about visual storytelling. I just read your story and was completely pulled in the emotion, the world, the characters it all played out in my head like a comic. I’d love to collaborate on adapting a scene into a short comic! I focus on expressive characters and impactful layouts, and I think we could create something really special together. I charge reasonably and am happy to share samples of my work if you're curious. No pressure just wanted to say how much I loved your writing and share the idea. Feel free to reach out on Discord: luansousa8287. "
Uniquely amazing
"This book gave a new twist on fantasy, and the plot seems really interesting for me. Although there's some points I want the author to consider improving. Review points: -Grammar errors. It's obvious. -Punctuation errors. The use of three dots(...) and overuse of exclamation marks(!) Exaggeration isn't necessary, leave it to how you construct the words that'll struck your readers and to your writing voice to give the conviction. Its no need for(jhsdlh!!!!) -Sentence construction. There is certain parts I read as confusing. Consider revising your whole chapters with only the plot on your mind and without looking for the first version you made, keep the original version. That could help you determine that changes. -Improve narration, use much simplier words I guess, so the readers wouldn't get confused. That's all. Other than that, thumbs up for the Author. This is a unique work! Keep improving and this soon will be a blockbuster. :)"
A nice start to the story. Though a bit of ambiguity, but nothing that an editing can not fix right.
"The plot seems to be a very interesting one. The prologue seemed a bit confusing at a certain point and also a few unnoticeable grammatical errors, but besides those - the storyline seems to be unique and engaging enough for the audience to want to read more. All that is required is a but of editing, otherwise the entire start and the description is brilliantly penned."
Good Read
"Definitely a good read, although a little confusing but it definitely seems readable."
