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What is your opinion?
As of now
"From what I read, the story is great with descriptions. There is proper background for the characters you've mentioned and it is a good insight to the readers. A run-through on grammatical errors here and there and you'll be good. Keep going!"
So far
"There are parentheses in the dialogue that don't belong there and make the text appear garbled. I like your use of description. Over all this just needs a good edit. Keep up the good work."
Idol To No One
"There were a few grammatical errors and words not spelled correctly. The paragraphs could be broken up more due to there being more than one speaker in the paragraphs. The ending was confusing."
