What is your opinion?
I Like it
"This is a good story so far. Most of the stories I've read, the earth kids are brought to the fantasy world but why not the opposite? I promised I'd read this on fanfiction and I'm impressed. I will be happy if you continue."
Interesting the further in you read
"This review is for the first chapter: I struggled to get through the first couple of paragraphs. The first couple of paragraphs were all setting detail without any introduction of characters. The description of the setting used repetitive words and had some tense mix up for words. It made for a very hard info section. (all the behind and beside that was hard to read). I could tell the author was writing the story as if it was a fairy tale, which was well done, after I got past some of the setting set up. The story became quickly interesting, and I was hooked. Chapter 2: The story was a lot more interesting to read that the first couple of chapters. I quickly read through it and I am now working on the third chapter. The one part that dragged a little was the introduction of the six characters. I knew who the characters were and what must have happened to them long before the author ever said a word. It really made the characters feel slow. I have not finished the third chapter, but I look forward to reading it and more."
It's doing well so far
"The story sounds good on first read. Although I can't say much about the plot yet because of it's only one chapter. But nonetheless, it seems to come off at a good start - the whole "get-sucked-into-a-storybook" kind of thing. The introduction actually reminds me of that one from How to Train Your Dragon, how Hiccup introduces Berk. Maybe you can put more gestures than just tagging with "said" - maybe more actions that would dictate their mood instead of saying what their mood is. :) Anyway, looking forward to see what this will progress to!"
