Chapter I
Another day in hell. It’s morning, my alarm is beeping, and I don’t feel like going to school today. I don’t feel like listening to people talking about who kissed whom, or stuff like that.
I got out of bed and ready for school. At least, it is senior year for me- the last. When school is over, I am going to be focused on finding the people who murdered my parents. I might not go to college, but it would be worth it because I will get to have my sweet revenge.
I got on my small Ford to go to school. Then, on my way to school, I stopped at Starbucks to get myself a refresher to drink before class starts. Though, with this traffic, I’m without no doubt, going to be late for class.
I got to my school a little late, so I probably missed a couple of minutes in my history class. I really shouldn’t have stopped at Starbucks, I don’t want Mrs. Chamber to give me detention. She gives anyone detention for being late, or for doing anything, for that matter.
As I entered the classroom, everyone was staring at me. They probably were staring because I was late, and I’m never late.
“I see you decided to join us, Ms. Knight,” Mrs. Chamber said. “Why are you late? I wouldn’t have expected it from you.”
“Well, Mrs. Chamber, there was a lot of traffic,” I explained. This is the worst excuse ever, she would never believe it.
“That is no excuse, Ms. Knight. For that, you’re getting detention. Now go and find yourself a seat!” She ordered.
There is no point in fighting back, so I just found a seat near the window in the back corner and sat down. I have never noticed this before, but there are so many people in this class. They should add more seats.
By the time lunch came, I sat at some table because some people were sitting where I usually sit. I’ll just come earlier tomorrow, and take it before anybody else does.
I decided to sit outside on a bench and wait for my friend, Lisa. As I waited, I saw those mean girls pick on a guy— a nerd. I was about to interfere, but right then Lisa appeared in front of me.
"Hi," Lisa said.
"Wait a second, I have to do something real quick," I told her.
While I was walking to defend the guy who was being picked on, this other guy came to defend him. I don't know why HE would come.
Hi, you have developed an interesting character here. Clearly she has opinions out of the ordinary, and you have shown a lot about her personality, particularly with her growing maturity in deciding not to fight her way out of trouble at all times and would have some regret about not going on to college. You have also indicated that she is clearly invested in her education, as she is normally not late. So the personality development is excellent. A few small points: grammatically it is '...who kissed whom...' and we are a bit confused about why a school girl would be driving a Lamborghini. Even if her dead parents were astonishingly rich, surely neither they, nor the trust fund looking after your character and her assets would expect a young girl to be driving a vehicle of this nature or would give her one. It wouldn't be safe, It might be what she wished she was driving but she wouldn't be in control of the family assets at this time,as as she is too young. Well done for creating a fascinating start.
Are you going to finish the story