What is your opinion?
Good story. Needs polishing.
"First of all, awesome choice of setting. Pokemon is still one of my favorite shows. You seem to really have Team Rocket down, with the interactions between Jesse, James, and Meowth. Also noticed that Harry Potter ref in the sixth chapter. The pokemon battles were fitting with how they go in the show and the Epilogue was a nice addition to the story and a good way to give it a sense of closure. Most importantly, you've done the hard part and finished the story, Now as to what you can work on making the story better. You need to pick a tense and stick with it. I noticed this especially in the early chapters when you were switching between past and present tense. I personally prefer past tense, but whatever you pick you need to be consistent. Some of the dialogue is awkward and doesn't flow correctly.. It's often hard to see when you read through on your own, but try slowing down and reading it aloud."
Who Doesn't Love Pokemon!
"This is the second Pokémon fan Fiction that I got hooked on within the first Chapter! I must amend you for creating a classic setting from the actual Pokémon series, When reading Jessie and James dialogue it feels like I'm actually watching them all over bickering like in each episode! I'm curious to read more! And so will update my review as I continue reading! So onwards to more technical stuff! I honestly have not found any problem with grammar. The whole chapter flowed smoothly and was easy to read! Great Job"
Another great fanfic!
"I used to watch Pokémon when I was younger, and this brought back a lot of memories. I read the first chapter and really like where it's going. The plot line makes sense, and I loved the way you portrayed the characters, especially Jessie and James. They are just like I remember them. You should enter this into the new fanfiction contest! There were quite a few grammatical errors and spelling issues, but I think a quick going-over would take care of that. It's a good beginning. Great work!"
