What is your opinion?
great start
"The story was interesting. It is good start. Maybe if you read it once and looked the verb tenses it would make more sense to me at times. Can I suggest running the story through this free https://prowritingaid.com/en/Analysis/WebEditor/Go?redirectToDocs=true"
Truth of the Beginning of Times
"Hi. We really liked your idea of a time-travelling genius. He's a little too perfect though. It's best to make your characters have some flaws as it means you can identify more with them. We also loved the constant DING of the gaming device/computer he took with him. Just the right thing to bring you back to Earth. You are obviously not writing in your home language, so well done for doing this. The thought of writing in French, German or Zulu terrifies us, although we have a smattering of all of these languages. So you are very brave to be attempting this. Your grammar will have to improve a bit if you want a lot of people to read your stories, but you are doing the right thing in writing because that will improve the grammar enormously. Best wishes for your future writing."
