Good Idea and Attempt

"First off, I like how the summary raises many questions, that all of them are answered in the poem, word to word. My impression from the poem is that the narrator is exploring their sense of self and the influence Marcus has over them. They are wondering whether Marcus would be good to them, whether he would falter somewhere. They are exploring the relationship and addressing its complexity. And the most important of all: they are looking to grow together. Just my impression. It is nice to see Marcus painted as a person, not as a symbol of good or evil. Poem lacks the magic of some metaphors and other figures of speech, which could really compliment your vision. A suggestion for you: try to write a poem which crescendos in the middle and then slowly cools down, like a volcano. That is the structure, I feel, that would have suited this sort of poem. Anyway, good job, keep writing!"