What is your opinion?
Influenced
"There were times when I was slightly confused about who felt what did to errors but it's a great book couldn't believe I got to the end this quickly. The plot twist was wow, I didn't expect her to the the one placing people in comas and damn that little kids scene with Patton made me grin from ear to ear. It's gonna be a great book!!!! Looking forward to see it finished .charms 💕"
Influenced Review
"This was definitely a story that I loved from the moment I started reading it to the moment I finished reading the chapters that had been uploaded so far. One of my favorite things if not favorite things is the love and car Tessa has towards Noah. Throughout the story, the moment that stuck in my head is when Tessa offered to toss some of her stuff so Noah, who brought a second backpack filled with his stuffed animals that he was supposed to bring, could keep them. It was such a sweet moment between the two that I absolutely loved. My only issue with the story, which really isn't a big deal, is that there would be some super strong and effective moments in the story, and instead of a swear word, it was a PG version (Freaking in place of fucking). It totally could be a personal preference but I just think it would add to the story if you used the swear because, without it, I feel it takes the reader away from the story. Other than that, it's an excellent story that I'm sure will get better as the chapters go on!"
Influenced
"A great story, which we thoroughly enjoyed. Stayed up late reading it, so it must have been good. The characters are very well defined, right from the first chapter, the author has a good grasp of writing and punctuation and grammar are excellent - a far cry from many stories on here. Well worth reading."
Instantly in love with it
"Awesome plot ... loved it.....👌👌👌 Great.."
In love!
"I'm anxiously waiting to read more of this story! I've been hooked since the beginning, and couldn't put it down. The writing is phenomenal despite a few grammatical issues, and the story and plot hooked me in moments. This is such a good story! I would absolutely recommend this story 100%!"
Love the Plot
"I love the plot of the story. It needs some touch ups here and there on punctuation and grammar, but over all, it's a really good story. I can't wait to read more. And yes, I would recommend reading this book. I can't wait to see what happens next, so I'll get back to reading now =)"
Great Story
"I just finished reading chapter one, and it's good. Really good. I can't wait to read more and see what else happens. Even though I knew the mother was going to die, I still cried when she did. There's some wrong words, and the punctuation and grammar needs some help., but over all, so far, the story is good. I would recommend it, even though I've only read the first chapter. I want to know what happens to her, and how she meets her cop."
Great slow burn mystery right there.
"I am not much into slow burn mystery stories but this hooked me. The prologue was really well done. Even though the first chapter was slow, reading about Terra was great. And the chapter after that was suspenseful. Carptenter seems to be a very interesting character as well. But I am enjoying Terra's storyline more. You have done a good job in creating mystery. The story feels atmospheric. But the use of present tense left me confused few times. Overall, the idea has potential. If you speed up the plot in upcoming chapters then this story may become a nail-biter. Good job."
Influenced
"Ever heard of killing your darlings. It means although you like the sentence, paragraph or even scene you wrote, you ask yourself, is it necessary? Kill it if it doesn't move the story forward. I'm writing another novel that I'll soon upload it but I found a lot of scenes, dialogues, and descriptions that slowed the pace of the story. Another way of slowing the pace, which you don't want, is poetic descriptions of what the character is doing. Don't describe every movement of the character. Whenever you write an action scene, don't make it too long, write the action, then write the emotions.. Show don't tell. There's a lot of telling. Think of it this way, if you're about to write the character's emotion, describe the senses or emotions. Finally, you should have used the prologue as your chapter one. Starting the story with an action pulls the reader into your story. Oh, and reason for not describing every movement of the character means you're not giving the reader room to imagine what's happening in their own view. Dialogues help with characters actions, and it moves the story faster. See Inkitt's The Writers Blog. There's a lot of 'how to write' information. I'm not saying I know my stuff, I'm just passing on what I've read, watched youtube, and online classes. Believe me, I had author's/teachers critique my work and some can break your heart, but that's how you learn. So, kill your darlings and write on. This story is going somewhere. Don't forget to comment on my story."
Different (but in a good way )
"I love the story's plot . I really wasn't sure whether I would like it at first but it really grows on you. It's different than what I normaly go for but I really enjoyed it. I noticed some grammatical errors but that doesn't take away from the book's good story plot. I enjoy the story's progression and love the concept of the notebook . I love how the heroine is willing to do anythibg to protect Noah.It's so kawahii . It's a captivating book and I would definitely recommend . I cannot wait to see where the story will go .. "
Good twists
"I’m a few chapters in and already this book has interesting twists and the plot goes places I didn’t expect it to. This adds great depth to the story. Chapters are a bit long, but for the flow of this story it works well. I will keep reading, would like to know how it all turns out, do recommend ! "
