What is your opinion?
Amazing story
"This book is very good. I am really angry about the council and how they disregarded the commanders theory about what's going on. But the story is good your grammar fits the time the story is in. Everything is amazing. It's a excellent book with amazing plots. It's worth a read and a recommendation."
Very solid start, but be mindful of details.
"I do like your start. You give enough expositional information through your introduction about the world where your story takes places in. Although a reader would maybe like a storytelling perspective more. As in an old man telling children a story from ages past, in that sense. Your writing style is very detailed, which is a very good thing! However, while your style is very good, be mindful of your perspective. In the middle of your second chapter, you suddenly swap perspective from a third-person, outsider perspective to a 'We' perspective, which confused me slightly. And then you swapped the 'We'-perspective for an 'I'- perspective without giving your main character a name or physical appearance. So keep that in mind going forward, yes? But all in all, a very, very solid start to your story! Keep it up and good luck writing your next chapters!"
