What is your opinion?
Extremely vivid descriptions!
"This is common idea (alpha dynamics) taken to a whole different spin. I really enjoy the way you describe "the man" and other characters so far. It is very easy to read, but also keeping up with the vivid adult theme. I am a bit confused on the diffrent classes but I'm sure as the plot develops I will understand better. I rarely add books to my reading list but I am definitely adding this one. It caught my eye for sure! There are a few mirror grammatical errors, nothing terrible or that can't be fixed. Another thing is I would make more clear what was happening in the beginning and how she got where she is now. That was the only part I found a bit confusing as well. Becises that, as I said excellent and will definitely come back to read. "
Good Start and Has Potential
"The plot seems interesting and has a lot of potential to be very unique. I like that the setting is more kingdom based, rather than in modern day. It gives it a different feel to be from a land completely created by the author, rather than the real world. I think there are some writing issues to work through, wording choices that could be changed to make the sentences flow more smoothly. Some of the sentences are lacking in punctuation and don't break, creating very long sentences that readers struggle to understand without rereading. I'm not personally a fan of first-person POV but you've done a good job of not deviating from the viewpoint. I struggled in the first chapter with the character's speaking. There was no directive of who was speaking and I had to go back to figure out who's line it was. Overall, I think you're off to a good start and look forward to where this story will go!"
Something new
"An interesting start to a very different kind of werewolf stories that are common on this platform. The story is set in a historical time and its own world, which is refreshing. The plot confuses me a bit, probably because there are only a few chapters written during the writing this review. The narrative is from a few different protagonists, which is again something new. Grammatical mistakes here and there but nothing too disruptive, can be fixed quickly. All in all cannot wait to see how this story will unfold. Good job author! P.s: if you have time, please review, comment or like my story. "
Has potential
"Hello, good day. So, for the prologue--though it is understandable to create a mysterious aura to draw readers in, I was drawn but rather confused with the imagery (this is due to the way how the first paragraph was written: "...stained, the beads along the edges" --edges of what? or which part of the cloth? Other minor things: - he could have moved faster than [the] wind - They said he [was] back There were some tenses that weren't consistent. Also found in Chapter 1 but quite minor, only a few tweaks for present tense words to become past tense--since your whole narrative is in the past tense. The plot: - Well, it's still too early but I'm warming up to Quin, an interesting character who's going against the norms concerning his hair. Despite showing signs being a playboy. - I like the world you've built: the portrayal of culture, especially the names of the places - Did I read too fast? I still don't know her name. But may she not be a mary sue, I hope, who is rather skilled in what she does: planting and pin making. Quite skilled. Perhaps the reasons for such would be explained in the later chapters. I suspect she is of higher birth, no? But, eh, there're just my presumptions. The writing style/technical writing skills - I appreciate you applying proper periods and commas for conversations - the prologue may need a bit more "umph"--the happenings/surroundings weren't vividly shown to me: Yes, I would understand its vagueness, but, since it's in 1st person POV, maybe write it when the girl is buried in snow as she heard the crunch of freshly fallen snow on the ground near her. - The last paragraph was confusing to me, but I understand if it is meant to be a cliff hanger, in which the next chapters will have to explain why both of them were dead. So, the rating is for the 2 parts. The story has great potential indeed. Anyway, I'm no professional editor and I may be incorrect, but this critique is from the knowledge I've acquired over the years. Have a good day."
