What is your opinion?
Definitely intriguing
"Hmm. I really am very curious as to what exactly Greenery did to become such a social pariah. I mean she did a complete 360 in appearance and personality in such a short amount of time that something terrible had to have happened. I get the sense that yes, she desperately wants to fit in and be desired...perhaps a little too much and things got out of hand with Bash. I like how the perspective changes from past to present and we get very different viewpoints of her life/struggles in public and in private. As the title hints, this is most likely what psychosis feels or seems like. Overall, I like what I've read and I'd love to see more chapters posted in the future."
Good start!
"Definitely, some mystery going on in there, I personally believe you should drop some more hints- readers love getting clues. Otherwise, the mystery turns a bit boring, you know what I mean. Your diction was well developed, the way you describe emotions, and portray them so beautifully- wow! The relation between Greenery and her Father was heart-warming - AWW! I love them so much. Their converstaion felt real and believable. Overall, it was a good start ,the only thing you need to do - unfold her past with each chapter. Good work! Keep writing, keep shining:)"
