What is your opinion?
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intereting and amazing
"well itbwas really interesting and it will be good if there is an update soon..thank u."
Piercing Chill
"Enjoyed it but really need book 2 please!!"
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"Definitely different!"
Angels descendants
"Totally love it Oh I hope there is a sequel. She is going to loose her friend Tina"
Awesome
"Wow. So good!!"
Come back to title
"I'm on tge edge of my seat!!"
Very interesting
"I love the fact it was an angel versus vampires and the virmoured hide their identity so well from Mary Kate a"
It was great but now I'm pissed 😡 it was to short and I wanna know it Jason and Mary-kate get their love story
"I loved it up until the end omg why do that to your readers I wanna know if the couple got their happy ending or are they never gonna see each other again or what did the angles kill all the evil vampires their was a lot left out"
It was great but now I'm pissed 😡 it was to short and I wanna know it Jason and Mary-kate get their love story
"I loved it up until the end omg why do that to your readers I wanna know if the couple got their happy ending or are they never gonna see each other again or what did the angles kill all the evil vampires their was a lot left out"
What??
"I'm left a little dumbfounded...."
Interesting story
"Good read so far"
confusing
"A lot in this story didn't add up. It's like the writer had it in their mind, but couldn't relay it to the reader. I felt like things were skipped and left out. I don't know. It's left me feeling a let down. It started our really good, but went downhill, fast."
Ok story
"I thought the story started off great with the heroine being attacked by a crazed man just minutes from her house. It was definitely attention getting and got me more interested in reading the story. But as I read on, I couldn't get over how Mary-Kate talked and acted. She didn't sound like a teenager to me when she talked to Tina or to Jason or Craig. Actually, none of them sounded like teenagers, they sounded more like rich, snotty adults. I also thought Mary-Kate was a bit of a baby, whined quite a bit, found herself in situations that she should have seen coming and never defended herself. The story has good bones and if the writer does decide to overhaul it, I would be game to reread it."
critique regarding assault scene
"I am very confused by the dynamics of the initial assault situation. The guy lifts her off the ground, I'm assuming from behind since she doesn't see him. Then he pins her down and covers her mouth. I'm thinking at this point she would be lying on her stomach, since otherwise he'd have to turn her around or she'd have to get up, which you don't mention her doing. She opens her eyes--you don't say so, but it's clear she closed them out of fear when he lifted her--and sees "what stood before me". If she is on the ground and he's holding her down with his hand on her mouth, how can he be standing? He should be sitting on top of her, right? And wasn't he behind her, not in front of her? Also, if she is pinned, how can she tell he's a head taller than her? It seems they'd have to both be standing for her to tell. Then from the rest of the scene it seems they are standing facing each other. If so, then she could probably push his hand away from her mouth and/or kick him. If she can't kick him because she's paralyzed by fear, or can't remove his hand because he has a supernaturally strong grip on her jaw, that's fine, but you have to write that in. I'd say "because otherwise she looks weak", but it seems from the rest of the writing that you want your protagonist to come off as weak and cowardly, so I'll just say "because otherwise her actions make no sense". Also, if she is living in a town where the last crime was a theft five years ago, it sounds pretty reasonable for her to walk home from work alone at 9:00, and I doubt most 17-year-olds can afford a car anyway. And there are some grammar mistakes in this story as well. And a line that makes no sense to me about how "messing with Brittany's men can lend her in jail"...you go to jail for boyfriend stealing? But what irks me mostly is the assault scene. I also don't like the main character's personality--she cowers and cries and never ever fights back--but maybe that is just because I am the complete opposite."
Thought I could last but I couldnt
"I have a rule for reading and I always finish a book if I make it past page 50 I stopped with this one. Honestly really wanted to find something to like about the main character but I couldn’t she’s fully the reason I didn’t finish. Never understood why they make women fall for the guy that gives them Stockholm syndrome or just goes out of their way to make them uncomfortable. 2/5 stars would not recommend and will not finish"
