What is your opinion?
The Lost Padawan
"I enjoyed the story and eager for more"
Stitch well done
"My Friend, Well done; a few things that could be improved upon; like you wouldn't relocate a dislocated shoulder ;) Put back into place; pop it back into place etc. That's really the only bit that really stood out to me that was largely wrong. You weave a nice tale that draws the reader in. You capture the time and place of where your story takes place. Predictable twist with the master; but still well done. Would be interesting to see more of this character."
the lost padwan
"All in all, not a bad story, however, there were too many punctuation errors for my liking. The writer has to understand that when you finish a line of dialogue and you use "he said/she said", you have to use a comma at the end of the dialogue. "I'm going to the store," he said. Not "I'm going to the store." He said. It's too distracting for the reader when the entire story is written like this."
