Good start but needs work

"The story moves at a very fast pace, it is difficult for the read to keep up. Add more description to the characters and the setting. Also there are a lot of grammar mistakes, and your first part just says ’start writing here’. It is an interesting idea though and your description does have a mysterious feel that draws the reader in. Get rid of the emojis though they are distracting. Good start though 👍🏻"