What is your opinion?
An excellent start
"I enjoyed the first couple of chapters. You had good use of detail in the first chapter, which is awesome because some readers really enjoy that. I love how I was able to picture the thunderstorm and the blue eyes in my head because of how descriptive you were The only thing I would suggest is that you are more descriptive with the characters and not just the setting. I felt like the first paragraph was a little choppy because of how many periods were used, so I would try to use commas and semicolons as well. I also think you meant to type "hemophobic" and not "homophobic" in the first chapter. It's not a huge mistake, but I figured you ought to know so that when you go back to edit at any point, you know exactly what to look for. I also think that the chapters could be a little longer, by a couple of paragraphs or so because the chapters seemed to be a little rushed for my pace. Other than that, great job with the first two chapters! I can't wait to read more!"
Great potential!
"This story has a good tone to it, the blurb was interesting and the first chapter was a great start!! I think some work needs to be done with your descriptions, they're not that well written yet, and I fell like you're still experimenting with this book. I liked the idea of the plot, two opposites that pull to each other, and I'm definitely interested in reading more from you! You can definitely improve this though! Much love, Coffee."
Devilish Secrets
"I think this story has the potential to be great. The idea and plot definitely is creative and the beginning really lures the reader in to keep on reading. I can't wait to read more. There are some grammatical and other errors of that nature which can go away with some editing. Maybe add some more details and there are some issues with paragraph spacing but other than that, good start! Keep writing!"
Has a potential to be great
"So far, it has a great story line. There are some grammatical mistakes, but if you fix those, I'm sure this book could really take off."
