Prologue
When Dimisha took the first step on this path, she had no idea where this would end. She just listened to her inner voice. A voice that was telling her only one thing.
"IN THE END, YOU WILL FIND WHAT YOU ARE LOOKING FOR,"
Before all of this, she was just a regular girl with simple dreams. She wanted to see the world, learn about people. She wanted to know if someone is good why that is, and if someone is afraid to be good, why it is.
She never got a chance to know her parents. Who they are or why they left her. She came to know about a family, by the orphanage she was bought up.
But life is not a bed of roses. It never goes with our plans.
An ordinary girl came to know that there was an extraordinary story behind her. After knowing that, she could not stay in the orphanage. Not that she did not like that place. That place was her life, her family. But, there was also another part of her life, unraveled, felt like a blank space. She could not live with that.
Bharata, a warrior whose fight was against some unknown forces. Most of the people are unaware of it. But, the reason behind humans or any other lives we see now around us is living only because of him.
Believe it or not, that's true, and Dimisha was his blood. As the heir of Bharata, she has some duty, some responsibility, to perform, and she happily accepted all of these.
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Maverick Nicholas
Hi Krishanku,
I just finished reading your story Agni...The Secret Door and I loved it so much. Your writing is captivating, and I kept thinking how cool it would look as a comic especially the way you blend fantasy and mystery in such a unique way.
I really loved the moment in Chapter 1, when Dimisha takes her first step on the path of discovery. The way you describe her inner voice guiding her, and her decision to leave the orphanage, is both emotional and cinematic. Later, in Chapter 5, when Dimisha learns about her connection to Bharata, the ancient warrior, the revelation is powerful and filled with potential for visual storytelling. The contrast between her ordinary life and the extraordinary legacy she inherits would translate beautifully into comic panels.
I’m a commissioned artist, and I’d love to draw your story into a comic/manga. No pressure though, I just think your work would look incredible in comic form.
You can check out some of my recent work on my DeviantArt (Username – Ev3Verse). If you’re interested, please message me on Discord (Username – Eve_verse) so we can bring the story to life visually. I’ll be waiting to hear from you!
Regards,
Evee